Friday, 7 February 2014

Ache (FSF)

Hosted by Lillie McFerrin's Five Sentence Fiction:

Nothing can be seen but through the gaps left by her prints on the windowpane; a life so blurry with no definition. Her pain set everything on fire, melting the snow that was covering her heart.

The sun which rose on the following day was cold enough to condense the vapor of her rage, leaving everything in the darkness of her despair.

Her aching soul can be seen through the watery gleam, hovering over the gloomy city. She’s waiting for the right time to strike back with full force, taking her revenge upon the days that caused her vanity. 


5 comments:

  1. I love the line "her pain set everything on fire." That is often what happens, isn't it???

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  3. Beautiful piece. It's old I know but glad to see you taking part in the FSF prompts.
    I enjoyed the use of imagery here. I was going to pick this image as my favourite
    "Her pain set everything on fire, melting the snow that was covering her heart" but I found that the piece is filled with other great imagery and i would end up copying/pasting the whole piece.

    Keep up the good work

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    1. I am very happy to see your comment ya nada. I almost forgot about that piece. Reading it after more over a year of writing it, it bring so many memories and anguish. I am surprised I am that it is all gone and over :D

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